What make you use those words
like stone
or fire
the other night?
They burned my heart.
I felt alone
unable to believe
you often repeat words
of friendly love,
your smile
that made me feel
I knew your heart
and could leave mine
safely with you.
Broken,
not my heart
but the trust I had
that I was safe
that though outside
the winds, cold and unfeeling
blew,
we
you and I
were one and would protect
each other's heart.
What made you use
such word?
I really liked your poem.
ReplyDeleteit is a very succinct poem. I love it.
ReplyDeleteThat's what i thought.I like it.
ReplyDeleteYou wrote the poem with lots of comprehension of love which touched me a lot. I really like your ideas of love.
ReplyDeleteYour poem is vivid, which reminds me of numerous life details can considered to love. Nice and warm picture!
ReplyDeleteI love how you only used the word "love" once in your poem, which makes it not cliched! Well done! I like your picture by the way :)
ReplyDeleteDid you fight with your boyfriend before you wrote the poem? Lol~ just kidding~ Actually, I think your poem is very true to life because when we are angry we often use hurtful language which we don't mean. We don't know how much we can hurt others when we use harsh language during a heated moment. Thank you for reminding me that controlling temper is important for everyone!
ReplyDeleteUr poem is pretty deep for me, it becomes deeper when u put up a picture of 2 males together...
ReplyDeleteI am talking about love between friends and the two people in the picture they are really great freinds, so I post their pic.
ReplyDeleteThis is a very deep poem. I really like the feeling of it. Great job~:D
ReplyDeleteI really like your poem!Love makes us feel sweet ,as well as bitterness.Good job~> <
ReplyDeleteYeah, I understand and am just trying to say u got a deep poem. thats it....~
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